Last term the children explored Moment In Time writing, which is writing that uses descriptive language to trigger the senses as you read. Here are a few to ponder, I felt like I was there too!
Scary Story by
Charlie
I run as fast as I can because an angry lion is chasing
me. Then I see a big ravine and there is
a vine so I jump onto the vine and swing across the ravine. But I find out I’m not the only one in the
jungle. I see him, no face, no eyes so I
kick him then scream and run.
For a moment I don’t see him and I look behind the tree
“aaagghhhh he is right there!!! Help meeee.”
Then he is gone. Where did he
go? I look down and up I also look
behind me. He is gone I think but he is now
right behind me “aaaagghhh”.
Then I fall into the ravine.
Learning to ride my
bike by Hollie
Heart beating really fast, I was frightened with fear then I
got happier and happier. My dad was
cheering and shouting “you can do it!”
I’m doing it, I thought but I fell off the bike. I got back on and I biked and biked. I could see lots of things, the green tree,
the green grass, the brown wood and the blue sky and my blue bike and Dad
cheering.
I am happy, I am so happy.
I could see my dad behind me. “I
did it,” I yelled.
The Big Splash by
Lucy
As I jump into the icy water, the strong wind blows against
my face and blows my hair. The noisy
seagulls go squawk as loud as they can.
Beneath me I see a humungous turquoise greeny ocean. Goose bumps, goose bumps 1, 2, 3. Bubbly, big waves crashing towards me. Aroma of sunlotion dripping down my friends’
backs, the aroma of glistening skin sticking to my tummy.
My soggy wet togs stick to my skin. This heart of mine is beating so fast. There is the sound of splashing down
below. As my feet touch the tip of the
white topped water – SPLASH! I dive in
the water like a dolphin and swim like a mermaid all the way back to the shore
to do it again.
